Oh yes, it looks much better now. Although... Do the G and W really have to be that thick? I mean, it looks better now but it still feels like there's something weird going on. Also, I never mentioned anything about the rifle, but that's kinda a nice touch.
I don't know what to say about TRANS BRC. Both look liable to be seen official translation of a game so yeah... Well, I CAN tell tell that the top one looks like it's saying TRANSBRCPRESENTS:, but I'm sure sure you were tight on space there considering the size of the original screenshot and all screenshots following it. I guess my suggestion for that is, if you can't get the "Presents" part in there smoothly, then it's probably safe to just take it off.