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目に見えぬ不安を数えて
« on: September 08, 2012, 03:10:06 pm »
This is from lyrics of a song (the opening to Masked Rider Kiva, to be precise).

Right now, I've got it as "Count up your unseen worries". "Unseen worries" sounds kinda...meh, to me. And hardly decent English.

Does anyone have any hints on how I could word this a bit better?

Edit: Oh, I also need help with a pun. One of the catch-phrases of the show is きばっていくぜ!. Which, until realizing that 気張る is a verb that means "to go all out", I was just translating it as "Let's go, Kiva!" (it's a phrase right before the transformation INTO Kiva, so it made sense at the time). Now I know it's meant to be a pun on Kiva/fang, but also have the meaning of "to go all out". So something like "Time to go all out!" but with a "fang" or "bite" pun in it. Any ideas?

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Re: 目に見えぬ不安を数えて
« Reply #1 on: September 08, 2012, 05:06:46 pm »
enumerate invisible insecurities ;P

yeah song lyrics are a sort of table-flip impetus for me
we are in a horrible and deadly danger

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Re: 目に見えぬ不安を数えて
« Reply #2 on: September 11, 2012, 09:56:08 am »
Yeah, song lyrics are kinda weird usually.

Any ideas as to the catch phrase?

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Re: 目に見えぬ不安を数えて
« Reply #3 on: September 11, 2012, 10:19:27 am »
"Time to scrap a bite"
Well the best I could think of :D

for the first one I'd have gone with "Counting those hidden fears"
but you got already another one for that.

Just trying to help.

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Re: 目に見えぬ不安を数えて
« Reply #4 on: September 11, 2012, 10:25:55 am »
Sink your teeth into it?

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Re: 目に見えぬ不安を数えて
« Reply #5 on: September 11, 2012, 05:58:27 pm »
Sink your teeth into it?
I like that. "Let's sink our teeth into them!"

Thanks!

I still need more suggestions for the lyrics, though.

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