I certainly prefer your patch. (great job by the way!) They gutted it badly, and it was always peculiar that they didn't shorten up lengthy scenes after removing dialog, such as when you arrive on Earth.
Personally I always wondered why the factory was attached to the senate in the first place, but that particular scene did seem better orchestrated in the english.
I can't speak for everybody, but if I did I'd thank you warmly for always making a concerted effort to ensure these patches run on hardware. So few people really take the effort to do so.